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Waiting here sitting in fear,
Lying down, hearing not a sound.
Death all around, a cycle of hatred we are bound.
Going nowhere, I simply exist somewhere.
People hate, why?
Innocents suffer, why?
The guilty go free and the innocent are locked up,
Never again to see the sky,
Again and again I ask,
Why?
Lying down, hearing not a sound.
Death all around, a cycle of hatred we are bound.
Going nowhere, I simply exist somewhere.
People hate, why?
Innocents suffer, why?
The guilty go free and the innocent are locked up,
Never again to see the sky,
Again and again I ask,
Why?
Literature
Love Poems
Do you love me?
Or do you not?
you told me once, but i forgot.
So tell me now, and tell me true, so I can say that I love you.
Of all the guys I've ever met, you're the one, I won't forget.
And if I die before you do, I go to heaven and wait for you.
From the moment I saw you i knew this was true
So damn beautiful my eyes fixated on you.
I wanted to hug you, hold you so tight,
I wanted to tell you this feels so right.
Now i have a voice, my feelings out loud,
A smile on my face so happy and proud.
A girl with a dream and a dream come true,
A girl who has found the one, the one is you!
When I first saw you I was afraid to
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i will love you forever
I Will Love You Forever
I love you so deeply,
I love you so much,
I love the sound of your voice
And the way that we touch.
I love your warm smile
and your kind, thoughtful way,
the joy that you bring
to my life every day.
I love you today
as I have from the start,
and I'll love you forever
with all of my heart
When I'm with you,
eternity is a step away;
my love continues to grow,
with each passing day.
This treasure of love,
I cherish within my soul,
how much I love you,
you'll never really know.
You bring a joy to my heart,
I've never felt before,
with each touch of your heart,
I love you more and more.
W
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It's Not Love
When was love supposed to make you cry?
I look to the heavens and ask them why.
But they don't whisper a single phrase
And I'm left wandering in a daze.
I thought it was love, but it couldn't be
Because there is just too much hurt inside of me.
When was love supposed to hurt so much?
Wasn't it all about yearning for their touch?
Instead I fear of what you might say
I think about the possibilities every day.
I just get this feeling that it will come crashing to an end
It's a feeling that seems to grow stronger when I see you again.
Is it just me or is the distance growing between us
Getting larger without the safety of our trust?
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Why? A common question asked in my poems. I still don't know why but I keep asking. This is not a haiku, unlike my nine previous submissions but it was written at BJ's as well.
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Technical note: (Internet Mom puts on English Professor Hat)
You might think about all those rhymes so close together....Rhymes that are too close can cause the mind to trivialize the content in a poem, although they can work just fine in a song lyric. This reads like a printed song lyric, rather than a poem, which is fine if that's what you're aiming for. But if it's not, you might want to see if you could recast it - counting on how you want people to experience it.
The two things I see that most interfere with the flow of good poetry meant to be read off a page are: rhymes that are close together, and having too many lines end in full stops, instead of comma pauses, which encourage the reader to go to the next line. The effect on the silent reader is that it's sing-songy or choppy to his or her inner ear. Just thought I'd throw that realization of at ya to play with.
(Takes off English Professor mortarboard, takes a deep sigh, and relaxes)
You might think about all those rhymes so close together....Rhymes that are too close can cause the mind to trivialize the content in a poem, although they can work just fine in a song lyric. This reads like a printed song lyric, rather than a poem, which is fine if that's what you're aiming for. But if it's not, you might want to see if you could recast it - counting on how you want people to experience it.
The two things I see that most interfere with the flow of good poetry meant to be read off a page are: rhymes that are close together, and having too many lines end in full stops, instead of comma pauses, which encourage the reader to go to the next line. The effect on the silent reader is that it's sing-songy or choppy to his or her inner ear. Just thought I'd throw that realization of at ya to play with.
(Takes off English Professor mortarboard, takes a deep sigh, and relaxes)